Writeologist | W-8.5

today i had the same topic

As a result of the growing use and development of modern technology, human labor is replaceable by machines. This replaceability benefits businesses from a financial and safety standpoint, while the drawbacks are a heavy reliance on electricity and heightened unemployment levels. Robots and machines can truly be less costly compared to human labor in the long run. Indeed, in contrast to the latter, the former do not need sick leaves, training sessions or days off but only timely maintenance and strict guidelines. Despite sometimes exorbitant upfront costs, machines can help reduce operational costs, allowing stakeholders earn more profits or re-invest into production, marketing or similar apsects of their business. Equally important is that, unlike human workers, machines do not raise concerns over safety, and even they malfunction, no human life is in danger. Such a safe environment is instrumental in ensuring companies do not spend millions of dollars on insurance and lawsuits. As for the negatives, one of them is the over-reliance on electricity. Machines require an uninterrupted supply of electric energy without which they will inevitably shut down, thereby halting production. Although electric generators may be of help in such cases, their dependence on fuel is indeed financially taxing, not to mention that they are only a temporary solution. On a societal level, the increasing use of machines may ultimately displace many workers out of their jobs, which will leave them without a means of making ends meet. In today’s world where joblessness is becoming ever more prevalent, such job displacement may exacerbate the already existing socio-economic issues such as poverty. In conclusion, the ability of machines to replace human workers can be financially beneficial, in addition to the fact that such non-human workers can also create a safe environment. The downsides of this shift, however, are a disporportionate dependence on electricity and higher unemployment rates.

#writing #task2

Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Climate change exerts different effects on business, with some assuming that these are largely deleterious. In contrast, others claim such a global issue is beneficial for businesses, since it offers more economic opportunities. From my perspective, the benefits of climate change outweigh its drawbacks. It is true that some businesses will be inevitably jeopardized as global warming evolves at an unprecedented rate. The chief among the jeopardized are agricultural companies, ones that largely depend on the use of land and can produce fruit and vegetables mostly under favorable weather circumstances. Yet given how unpredictable weather patterns are becoming today, coupled with other, no less important, issues such as soil erosion, deforestation and overgrazing, many farms are leaving the business. Admittedly, only few are transitioning to innovative agricultural practices, like vertical farming, but If this outflow continues to rise, not only food supplies might be disrupted; short-term food shortages might be caused too. I, meanwhile, support those defending the beneficial aspects of climate change who may cite innovations as the main argument. According to this view, as a result of unstable weather patterns, manufacturers of air conditioning systems and indoor farming equipment, for example, have seen signficiant growth in sales, thereby multiplying their profits. The adoption of innovative farming techniques has also been a change for the better for small-scale farmers because of more regular harvests and reduced operational costs while, unlike before, growing crops in small trays or containers. Indeed, it is these positives that have had a sweeping effect on the business landscape over the recent decades, helping businesses become more flexible and thus more profitable. In conclusion, it should be acknowledged that climate change may affect adversely businesses, including agricultural companies. My firm conviction is that supporters of the advantages of such a global problem - namely, increased flexibility and innovations - put forward more compelling arguments.

Look at how grammatically flexible the report is:

• Remaining...., the USA • ...New Zealand..., following.... • Of the...., with its figure climbing.... • The UK, recording....., stood....

The same participle clause BUT in different forms and places.

❤️

The table compares how many people took part in one survey related to wildlife in Britain from 2001 to 2009, at 2-year intervals, categorized into adults and children. Overall, regardless of category, participant numbers rose significantly over the period, despite slight drops. Notably, adults had been by far the largest participant group until they witnessed a notable decrease at the end. This was in sharp contrast to children who, while in a minority from 2001 to 2007, experienced rapid growth at the end. It was also only then that the gap between these groups was closed. The overall number of survey respondents jumped more than sevenfold from 48,000 in 2001 to 364,000 in 2005, after which there was a negligible drop of 2,000. By 2009, there had been a considerable increase to 540,000, thus marking a more than eleven-fold rise over the 8-year timeline. Of these participants, three times more adults (36,000) than children (12,000) participated in the survey in 2001 - a pronounced gap of 24,000. Whereas the figure for the former soared to 331,000 during the ensuing 6 years, that for the latter initially tripled in 2003, decreasing to 31,000 by 2007. In 2009, after a significant drop in the number of adult respondents and a manyfold increase in that of the younger ones, both groups stood on par at 270,000.

#writing #task1

Band 8.5+

The maps compare the conditions of a museum in 1957 to those of 2007. Overall, the place underwent significant improvements in visitor-oriented facilities as a result of the disappearance of a national history exhibition and a museum storeroom to introduce a museum shop, cafe, car park, education centre, special exhibitions room and reception. These additions, however, also came at the cost of local natural features, with a majority of trees being chopped down. In 1957, there used to be a narrow range of visitor-friendly amenities yet more trees. The only road, along which there were many trees growing, ran in the southern zone, with a side road branching out towards the main estate in the central area. This building had an entrance hall, and walking past it, visitors could find a local history room to their left and the museum storeroom on the other side. The national history exhibition was located at the rear section and occupied more space. To the north, there was a garden, where visitors could take a stroll, while the estate was surrounded by numerous trees. Five decades later, the scope of facilities was substantially widened. In particular, the road stretch remained intact, in contrast to the side road, which disappeared. Another striking change is the introduction of a car park constructed by the road, thus addressing the needs of visitors with cars. While the greenery in the south was cleared, the main building saw an expansion northwards and westwards. There were now 6 rooms, including the newly-introduced special exhibitions, which replaced the national history exhibitions, and a cafe occupying the section where the museum storeroom used to stand. As well as these, the museum shop, education centre and reception were also added. For this building to expand, the trees in the north were cut down, as were those to the west of the estate.

#task1 #writing

Why Task Achievement is something REALLY hard to get along with ?

➡️In this example, the overview has 5 features: physicians outearned others, pay was different, the USA had the largest difference, the USA paid the most, the Czech Republic paid the least. 🔴 If ANY of the sentences in the bodies contradicts ANY of these features, you will normally expect T/A - 7.0 as the most you can get. (a harsh scenario). 🔴 If ANY of these features is left UNDEVELOPED/UNDERDEVELOPED, you get punished with T/A - 6.0/7.0.

✔️ So, a great rule of thumb: make sure your overview CHECKS OUT (compare it to the bodies and the graph; if EVERYTHING matches perfectly, go on to check the rest of things). #task1 #tip #writing

Save and learn!

As lean as 190 words mainly because of the focus on COMPARISON. #task1 #writing

Some people think that charity organizations should only offer help to people of their own country. But others believe that these organizations should give aid to people in great need wherever they live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

One highly-debated topic among people is the distribution of charitable donations. Some assume this aid should be directed to local people only, while others dismiss this view. They claim the donations should be channelled to help those who need such help the most regardless of how far they are. Although I acknowledge the importance of the distribution covering far-away deprived areas, I believe when costs involved are exorbitant, the decision should be made on a case-by-case basis. Proponents of exclusive charitable support for locals might regard the reduced costs of delivering the aid as the main rationale behind their view. In their opinion, the closer those in need are, the less time, effort and money, otherwise finite resources, are necessary for charity organizations to spend to complete their socio-economically important mission. A run-down village located within several kilometres, unlike another one hundreds or thousands of kilometres away, is undoubtedly more accessible, reducing transportation costs. This is particularly sensible for countries with ever-increasing fuel prices, for example Russia. Critics of this idea, however, emphasize discriminatory treatment of such unfair allocation of resources. Not only will distant disadvantaged areas be deprived of support if areas in close proximity are the only ones to partly rely on charity, but they will also be left to their tight budgets to, for example, develop local infrastructure, from the construction of hospitals to subsidies for low-income families. Conversely, were they accorded the same opportunities to receive charitable aid, this might drive the communities in need out of poverty. Although the budget of charity organizations may not be wide enough to provide significant financial aid to all areas, prioritizing equality can serve as an essential tool to maintain social integrity. My firm conviction is that, should supporting distant areas in need prove costly, it would then be more rational to provide aid to local areas to avoid wasteful spending of charitable donations. Only through this effective use of charitable resources can we ensure that communities’ contributions to charity are not only appreciated but also used productively.

#writing #task2

just to make your mood ✔️

The table compares how much oil was produced in 4 nations between 2000 and 2004, measured in barrels per day. Overall, despite a drop, Nigeria produced increasingly more oil, becoming the leading producer by the end. While Chad introduced such production only in 2003 and saw growth after that, Somalia grew uninterruptedly. This was a sharp contrast to Congo, a country where oil extraction was the biggest initially yet declined continuously over the period. Nigeria and Congo extracted substantially more oil than others, with their initial figures at 205,000 and 275,000, the highest on the chart. Then, the former had decreased to 190,000 by 2002 before increasing to 213,000 and thus marking the largest volume of oil extracted in 2004. The latter, meanwhile, witnessed a continuous decline to 203,000, an amount 72,000 barrels lower than the original one. As for the breakdown of the remaining countries, Chad, unlike others, recorded no production in the first three years. From 2003 to 2004, however, it extracted progressively more oil, with the figure jumping from 8,000 to 50,000. Somalia’s oil production was the smallest between 2000 and 2002, when it climbed from 5,000 to 17,000. In 2004, this figure, after a notable increase, converged with that for Chad at 50,000 and therefore translated into ten-fold growth over the time frame.

#task1 #writing

🟢These are the topics that, essentially, helped me to level my game from 7/7/7/7 to 8/9/9/9. ➡️It took me a long time to master them, of course. 🔵I would like hold a 2-week challenge covering these for anyone with 6.5 in Task 2. ➡️It will NOT be focused on writing essays—it will BE focused on transforming a mediocre script into something examiners admire. I'll announce everything in detail very soon. #writing

I like this part. It is a small move towards less redundant and thus leaner reports (which otherwise are called ‘examiners’ reports’) Not ‘in both large and small ones’ but ‘regardless of size’. - no repetition ✔️ - fewer words ✔️