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01 Kripto valyuta va iqtisodiy pufak(financial bubble) haqida bir nechta videolar va ilmiy dars-baxslar ko'rdim, shulardan ba'zilarini ulashmoqchiman:
https://youtu.be/25JSVrV3PJ0?si=_wyNpOAsaGAIvKO1 (baxs, Abror Muxtor Aliy)
https://youtu.be/CRrH7o2me9A?si=XbtWQHzg-juenpRK ( ilmiy dars, asosan bitkoin haqida, Mahmud Usmon)
Financial bubble va kripto valyuta gambling ekanligi haqida (inglizcha):
https://youtu.be/3vDPowCDWc8?si=iAoM_Y1BtLBS3Dqw
https://youtu.be/I5ZR0jMlxX0?si=qaOri3WBmNjXYBgD
https://youtu.be/RDDg4zDxqGQ?si=_ZxsICjdfW8zVU9v
https://youtu.be/DmYp5U7g42k?si=Ogvtt5--f5MpZ1rA | 26 | 0 | Loading... |
02 Quitting is a mental thing, not a physical thing.
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03 ATTENTION🛑🛑🛑
Do'stlar, yaqinda ikkita guruh ochildi. Ikkalasi ham beginner guruh. Ingliz tilini boshlamoqchi bo'b yurgan yaqinlarimizga taklif etamiz:
Vaqt » juft kunlari ertalab 9:30
Vaqt » juft kunlari 14:30
Manzil: Everest Navoiy 2 (Alisher Navoiy metro)
Narx : 450k
Davomiyligi: 3 oy
PS: atigi 45ta joy qoldi tezroq yozilamiz:)
Umumiy hisobda 7ta guruhim bor ayni paytda (hamma darajalarda guruhlar bor» from Beginner to IELTS)
DM ✍️ » @latipovd | 53 | 0 | Loading... |
04 An increasing numbers of household appliances is bought by significant numbers of people these days. Although this tendency may have negative repercussions on the environment, many people can benefit from it, having more free time for activities other than domestic chores.
On the one hand, the impact of growing demand on household goods on the environment cannot be disregarded. Buying new household appliances may lead to obsolescence of the previous devices, since new appliances are usually more functional and able to outperform the previous generations of the technologies. This means that landfills may be the next place of these earlier-bought devices. For instance, in 2022, Americans generated 6.9 million tons of electric waste. Unfortunately, disposal of these goods is usually much more difficult due to their hazardous materials they are made from, potentially contributing to the environmental issues. This can explain why buying more household goods can be damaging for the ecology.
On the other hand, people can acquire more free time due to the conveniences created by the new and modern household goods. With the technological prowess of household devices, there is often no need to do household chores manually any more. While not all of domestic chores can be done by household appliances, these devices can carry out most of the tasks. For instance, people do not need to wash laundries manually, as washing machines can take over this task. Instead, people can focus on their professional responsibilities or simply spend quality time together with their family members.
In conclusion, the increasing demand for household goods can exacerbate already existing environmental problems. However, it should be noted that people can enjoy their life in a far better way thanks to the comfort offered by these devices.
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05 Yangi beginner guruh:
TTS (Tuesday, Thursday, and Saturday) kunlari ertalab 9:30 da
Manzil: Everest Alisher Navoiy 2
O'qituvchi: Latipov Dilmurod (IELTS 8)
Navoiy ko'cha » Everest Navoi 2 | 73 | 0 | Loading... |
06 IDP, CD - May 19, 2024, Tashkent ✅
Diagrams show two Tunnels in one Australian city.
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07 My speaking partner got this amazing score 🔥🙌
Congratulations 🥳🔥🔥 | 195 | 0 | Loading... |
08 Band 20 essay from ChatGPT | 198 | 2 | Loading... |
09 Faylni ham yukladim, shuni kiritgan bankimga olib borsam bo'ldimi? | 195 | 0 | Loading... |
10 Refund uchun sms keldi, link jonatishdi, lekin Linkni bossam faqat app orqali kira olas deyapti, App ni ham tortdim, endi nima qili? | 191 | 0 | Loading... |
11 Media files | 33 | 0 | Loading... |
12 "If I write IELTS answers every day, will it help me increase my score?"
When I was visiting Ad Astra yesterday, I was asked a lot of good questions. Here is one: "If I write IELTS answers every day, will it help me increase my score?"
The short answer is the annoying "It depends."
Here are some considerations:
1⃣ Writing every day certainly helps with timing. If timing is a problem, then the answer is Yes.
2⃣ In order to improve though, you need to add new things to your writing. It’s totally possible to write 30 IELTS essays in one month, and they will all be the same old level. To improve, you need to add something you haven't used before: higher level lexis, a complex grammar structure, a new cohesive device, deeper development of the idea.
3⃣ It's probably best to write daily-ish rather than daily. I'm afraid writing every single day might result in getting fed up with IELTS, and this is not a feeling conducive to improvement. Alternatively, you can write daily, but not always full answers, especially if you want to focus on adding new elements.
Overall, it is certainly a great idea to write often - this will give you confidence and courage.
Where do you stand on writing IELTS answers daily? Any important considerations missed? | 43 | 0 | Loading... |
13 I don't claim that I could do a lot for Abdusattor's writing skills, I just tried to provide feedback for him for several times. Despite this little practice, he could manage to reach 6.5 in writing, which is amazing I guess, cuz I also got 6.5 😄 | 257 | 0 | Loading... |
14 Bizda personal information degan narsaga tupirib qo'yishgande boru😂 Nomer so'rab OTM larga borishadi, ular hamma talabani nomeri, ism, familiyasi hammasini shundo bervorishadi, jin ursin | 231 | 0 | Loading... |
15 I realized that there are problems related to TR in my essay too, I haven't compared the two ways of filmmaking | 221 | 0 | Loading... |
16 While the version proposed by Chatgpt has not excellent TR, you can learn a lot for the improvement of other areas | 213 | 0 | Loading... |
17 ## Revised Essay with Explanations:
Original Introduction:
> Nowadays, it is customary that large filmmaking companies are not the only game players in this field because of modern technologies that everyone can produce a film with. Although this may result in issues associated with moral standards, there are many benefits that may result from the ease of film creation.
Revised Introduction:
> The advent of digital technology has democratized filmmaking, enabling individuals beyond large production companies to create and share their own films. While this accessibility presents exciting opportunities for creative expression and innovation, it also raises concerns about potential ethical challenges and the impact on the established film industry.
Explanation:
* Replaced informal language ("game players") with more formal vocabulary ("advent," "democratized").
* Broadened the scope by mentioning creative expression and the impact on the film industry.
* Used a more complex sentence structure to convey the main idea.
Original Body Paragraph 1:
> On the one hand, some people may face issues related to social disagreement to their content. Each society usually has certain social standards and values which people living there need to obey. It should also be noted that some people may fail to take these common standards into account while making a film. This is mainly because of human nature, meaning each person, as a human, may make a mistake during their lives despite their unwillingness to do so. However, this often does not mean that they cannot be condemned by the members of society because of the value of the existing morals. For instance, in Uzbekistan, content creators are sometimes criticized by the general public on social media platforms for these filmmakers’ unethical products which cannot match social standards out there. Among many reasons, this is only one which can explain why accessibility of filmmaking can give rise to some issues for the creator of a film.
Revised Body Paragraph 1:
> One potential drawback of accessible filmmaking lies in the risk of generating content that clashes with established social norms and values. As independent filmmakers may not possess the same level of awareness or sensitivity as established production companies, their work could inadvertently offend or alienate certain audiences. For example, in Uzbekistan, instances have arisen where content creators faced public criticism on social media platforms for producing films deemed incompatible with local cultural standards. This highlights the importance of responsible filmmaking and considering the potential societal impact of creative choices.
Explanation:
* Replaced vague phrasing ("issues related to social disagreement") with more precise language ("content that clashes with established social norms").
* Developed the argument by explaining why independent filmmakers might be more prone to such issues.
* Used a more formal and objective tone.
* Improved sentence structure and flow.
Original Body Paragraph 2:
> On the other hand, this ease of filmmaking can make a positive turning people in many people’s lives. It is undoubted that filmmaking can pave the way for becoming famous as these films can gain public eye on media, especially on social media platforms. Hence, independent filmmakers can make handsome profit in various ways, including advertising. Take my country, Uzbekistan, as an example one more time. Independent content creating profession is considered one of the most lucrative professionals. This is because this job can aid them in reaching financial independence thanks to the opportunity for making a lucrative deal with businesses for advertising. This means that people can, via independent filmmaking, attain financial security due to the availability of digital filmmaking devices.
Revised Body Paragraph 2: | 164 | 0 | Loading... |
18 > Conversely, the democratization of filmmaking offers numerous opportunities for individuals and communities. It empowers aspiring filmmakers to tell their stories, share their perspectives, and reach a global audience through online platforms. This can lead to greater diversity of voices and narratives within the film industry, enriching the cultural landscape. Moreover, independent filmmaking can provide avenues for economic empowerment, enabling individuals to generate income through advertising, crowdfunding, or distribution deals.
Explanation:
* Expanded the scope by discussing the benefits beyond financial gain, such as empowerment, diversity, and cultural enrichment.
* Replaced informal language ("handsome profit") with more formal vocabulary ("economic empowerment").
* Improved sentence structure and flow.
* Used more specific examples of how independent filmmakers can generate income.
Original Conclusion:
> In conclusion, the ease of content creation can raise concerns for independent filmmakers because they sometimes may disregard common morals by chance. However, independent filmmaking can enable people to achieve their financial goals thanks to the opportunities for advertising products of companies.
Revised Conclusion:
> In conclusion, the accessibility of filmmaking presents both opportunities and challenges. While it empowers individuals and fosters creative expression, it also necessitates a responsible approach that considers ethical implications and potential societal impact. As digital technology continues to evolve, it is crucial to find a balance between artistic freedom and social responsibility within the realm of filmmaking.
Explanation:
* Summarized the main points of the essay.
* Reaffirmed the balanced perspective on the issue.
* Offered a concluding thought about the future of filmmaking.
* Used more sophisticated vocabulary and sentence structures.
Additional notes:
* This revised version is approximately 350 words, which is within the recommended range for IELTS Writing Task 2.
* You can further personalize the essay by adding specific examples from your own knowledge or experience.
* Remember to proofread carefully before submitting your final essay. | 218 | 0 | Loading... |
19 TOPIC (day 6): Nowadays, it is not only large companies that are able to make films as digital technology enables anyone to produce films. Is this a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, it is customary that large filmmaking companies are not the only game players in this field because of modern technologies that everyone can produce a film with. Although this may result in issues associated with moral standards, there are many benefits that may result from the ease of film creation.
On the one hand, some people may face issues related to social disagreement to their content. Each society usually has certain social standards and values which people living there need to obey. It should also be noted that some people may fail to take these common standards into account while making a film. This is mainly because of human nature, meaning each person, as a human, may make a mistake during their lives despite their unwillingness to do so. However, this often does not mean that they cannot be condemned by the members of society because of the value of the existing morals. For instance, in Uzbekistan, content creators are sometimes criticized by the general public on social media platforms for these filmmakers’ unethical products which cannot match social standards out there. Among many reasons, this is only one which can explain why accessibility of filmmaking can give rise to some issues for the creator of a film.
On the other hand, this ease of filmmaking can make a positive turning people in many people’s lives. It is undoubted that filmmaking can pave the way for becoming famous as these films can gain public eye on media, especially on social media platforms. Hence, independent filmmakers can make handsome profit in various ways, including advertising. Take my country, Uzbekistan, as an example one more time. Independent content creating profession is considered one of the most lucrative professionals. This is because this job can aid them in reaching financial independence thanks to the opportunity for making a lucrative deal with businesses for advertising. This means that people can, via independent filmmaking, attain financial security due to the availability of digital filmmaking devices.
In conclusion, the ease of content creation can raise concerns for independent filmmakers because they sometimes may disregard common morals by chance. However, independent filmmaking can enable people to achieve their financial goals thanks to the opportunities for advertising products of companies.
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20 ## Strengths of the Essay:
* Clear Thesis Statement: The essay clearly states the topic and presents the writer's opinion in the first paragraph.
* Balanced Approach: The essay discusses both sides of the argument, acknowledging the potential for technology to both decrease and increase crime.
* Specific Examples: The writer provides relevant examples to support their claims, such as the decrease in street robberies in London and the rise in cybercrime reported by the FBI.
* Logical Organization: The essay follows a clear structure, with each paragraph focusing on a specific point.
* Concluding Paragraph: The essay summarizes the main points and reiterates the writer's opinion.
## Weaknesses of the Essay:
* Limited Scope: The essay primarily focuses on surveillance technology and cybercrime, neglecting other types of technology and their impact on crime (e.g., social media, artificial intelligence, etc.).
* Oversimplification: The essay presents a somewhat simplistic view of the relationship between technology and crime, without exploring the complexities and nuances involved.
* Lack of Nuance in Arguments: The arguments could be strengthened by acknowledging counterpoints and addressing potential objections. For example, the essay could mention the limitations of surveillance technology, such as privacy concerns and potential for misuse.
* Repetitiveness: Some points are repeated unnecessarily, such as mentioning the alarming function of cameras multiple times.
* Word Choice: The essay occasionally uses informal language ("tools cannot help people prevent crimes") and could benefit from more precise vocabulary to enhance the formality of the writing.
* Sentence Structure: Some sentences are overly long and complex, which can hinder readability.
* Grammar and Punctuation: There are a few minor grammatical errors and punctuation mistakes that should be corrected.
## Suggestions for Improvement:
* Expand the scope of the essay: Explore a wider range of technologies and their potential impact on crime, including both positive and negative aspects.
* Provide a more nuanced analysis: Acknowledge the complexities and challenges associated with using technology to address crime.
* Strengthen the arguments: Address potential counterarguments and provide evidence to support each claim.
* Vary sentence structure and word choice: Use a wider range of vocabulary and sentence structures to improve readability and enhance the formality of the writing.
* Proofread carefully: Ensure that the essay is free of grammatical errors and punctuation mistakes.
## Overall:
The essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and presents a clear argument. However, it would benefit from further development and refinement to address the weaknesses mentioned above. | 148 | 0 | Loading... |
21 1St body too specific bogan, it's not good, it's too bad | 141 | 0 | Loading... |
22 I was gonna write an essay with 3 main body paragraphs, I couldn't manage time in an effective way though and changed my mind | 161 | 1 | Loading... |
23 TASK 2 (DAY 5)
TOPIC: Some people think technology development decreases crime, while others believe that it actually encourages crime. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.
There is a thought that crime rate is decreased due to technological advancement. However, it is also widely believed that this advancement compounds the situation related to criminal activities. Although modern technologies may trigger severe crimes, I firmly believe that these tools can definitely help people prevent crimes for several reasons.
On the one hand, some people may think that technologies can enable us identify crimes even before they happen. To elaborate, with today’s advanced technologies, especially cameras and drones, both an average person and police officers can monitor surrounding areas of their poverty or public places. It is true that this often requires constant monitoring of humans since these cameras cannot judge whether an unidentified person is a potential criminal or not. However, as most of these cameras often have alarming systems, they can report about the ongoing suspicious situation whenever the unknown person crosses the borders of home or a particular place. This means that these modern devices can mitigate criminal activities thanks to their alarming functions. For example, the number of street robberies declined by up to 20% in London. This can demonstrate that how positive impact technology have on reducing a crime rate.
On the other hand, other, including me, claim that modern technologies can give rise to new types of crimes which are impossible in the absence of them. Undoubtedly, in the past, people used to commit crimes physically as opposed to modern world where more and more crimes can be perpetrated online within the comfort and secure place for criminals. While, with safety apps or other tools, people usually take preventive measures, this sometimes cannot deter criminals attain their goal. For instance, FBI’s Internet Crime Complaint Center reports that the number of people complaining about cybercrime has been steadily increasing, and billions of dollars of these people are lost annually. This can explain why the development in technology may cause serious crimes.
In conclusion, modern technologies can be considered as a double-edged sword which can have both positive and negative aspects. This is because, by harnessing their power, people can deter some potential crimes, while these tools can still enable some commit criminal activities. | 176 | 2 | Loading... |
24 Long-awaited one🔥 | 119 | 0 | Loading... |
25 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7x1SrpiUINM&t=15106s | 102 | 0 | Loading... |
26 The bar charts compare the proportion of people’s total expenditure on various products and services in a particular European country in 1998 and 2008. Overall, the percentage of people’s expenses generally decreased, while the figure for clothing and Electronic devices increased in 2008.
In 1998, the prominent expenditure figures were electronic devices and clothing. This was because the percentage of people’s spending were 16% for electronic tools and 12% for clothing, by far higher than that of other figures. People spent the least percentage of their money for newspapers/magazines and going to cinema, with respective 3% for both expenses.
In 2008, the percentage of people’s spending generally showed a decline for most of the expenses. Among these, the percentage of spending for holidays decreased significantly, with 5% and 3% decline. By contrast, there was an upward tendency in the percentage of expenditures for clothing and newspapers/magazines, reaching to 20% and 18%, respectively. The percentage of people’s spending remained unchanged only for eating out at 6%.
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27 The bar charts compare the proportion of people’s total expenditure on various products and services in a particular European country in 1998 and 2008. Overall, the percentage of people’s expenses generally decreased, while the figure for clothing and Electronic devices increased in 2008.
In 1998, the prominent expenditure figures were electronic devices and clothing. This was because the percentage of people’s spending were 16% for electronic tools and 12% for clothing, by far higher than that of other figures. People spent the least percentage of their money for newspapers/magazines and going to cinema, with respective 3% for both expenses.
In 2008, the percentage of people’s spending generally showed a decline for most of the expenses. Among these, the percentage of spending for holidays decreased significantly, with 5% and 3% decline. By contrast, there was an upward tendency in the percentage of expenditures for clothing and newspapers/magazines, reaching to 20% and 18%, respectively. The percentage of | 108 | 1 | Loading... |
28 Certainly! Here's a revised version of your essay with explanations for each sentence revision:
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Title: The Impact of Early Childhood and School Years on Young Minds
Introduction:
Early childhood experiences are often hailed as crucial in shaping a child's future, yet some argue that the teenage years, particularly spent in school, hold more sway over their development. In this essay, I will argue that while early childhood lays important groundwork, it is the school years that exert a more pronounced influence on young minds.
Body Paragraph 1:
*Weak Points: Lack of clear structure, Limited use of evidence, Lack of counterarguments*
Before children even step foot in a classroom, the cognitive functions they develop during early childhood significantly impact their future trajectory. Contrary to popular belief, research conducted by Masaru Ibuka suggests that critical cognitive abilities are largely formed by the age of three, setting the stage for their educational journey. These formative years create a strong foundation upon which future learning and development build.
Body Paragraph 2:
*Weak Points: Lack of clear structure, Weak transitions*
However, it's during the school years that children truly begin to interact with the world and refine their cognitive abilities. School provides a structured environment where they not only acquire knowledge but also learn to think critically and make independent decisions. As they navigate various subjects and social dynamics, they develop the skills necessary for maturity and independence.
Conclusion:
*Weak Points: Lack of clear structure, Weak transitions*
In conclusion, while early childhood experiences lay essential groundwork for a child's development, it is the school years that offer a more dynamic and impactful environment for shaping young minds. By acknowledging the significance of both stages, we can better understand the holistic journey of cognitive development from infancy to adolescence.
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Explanation for revisions:
1. Introduction: Restructured to clearly outline the argument and provide context for the essay's focus on early childhood and school years.
2. Body Paragraph 1: Retained the core argument about the importance of early childhood experiences but strengthened the structure by providing evidence from Masaru Ibuka's research and emphasizing the foundational role of early cognitive development.
3. Body Paragraph 2: Developed the argument for the impact of school years by highlighting the opportunities for critical thinking and independence provided by formal education.
4. Conclusion: Provided a succinct summary of the main argument and the importance of both early childhood and school years in shaping young minds.
Overall, the revisions aim to enhance clarity, coherence, and persuasiveness by addressing the weak points identified in the original essay. | 100 | 0 | Loading... |
29 I don't like it that much tho😐 | 83 | 0 | Loading... |
30 Early childhood experiences before starting school is considered as the most impactful period on their future lives. Another group of people hold completely different view that experiences gained as a teenager, particularly at school, are more impactful. While children can develop various cognitive functions until starting school, I firmly believe that school years can shape young minds more noticeably.
On the one hand, cognitive functions nurtured at the very early ages often start impacting children before they start school. Undoubtedly, some people do not realize that children’s future can be related to all the situations until they start kindergarten. This is because most people usually think that children make simple choices, such as food, taste, or song, in their day-to-day lives, and cannot respond to other ongoing situations. However, according to a research conducted by Masaru Ibuka, all the important cognitive abilities of children is developed until they become 3 years old, and their future learning process, including at school, is largely associated with these skills. Therefore, there is a strong correlation between early childhood years before starting school and children’s future lives.
On the other hand, others, including me, argue that children’s real personality is nurtured when they are a teenager. Children usually start learning the world and analyzing ongoing circumstances around them during their school years. What I mean here is that as long as children acquire knowledge in various subjects at school, this can lead to improvements in their critical-thinking abilities. As a result, children begin making more and more independent decisions, which are usually a sign of maturity, on their own, meaning they can become an independent person from these years on. This can explain why school years are arguably more impactful for children.
In conclusion, before starting school, one of the most important cognitive developments often occur in children’s lives, potentially shaping their mind. However, I would argue that because of the knowledge they learn, children’s full personality is shaped, and they become an independent and mature person from these years on.
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31 Day 4
TOPIC: Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the biggest influence
on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more
influential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. | 96 | 1 | Loading... |
32 Video for analysing:
https://youtu.be/yczYThn4nDI?si=XZA9dfrKXhV0jtnv | 111 | 0 | Loading... |
33 ## Analysis of Your Essay:
Strengths:
* Clear Thesis Statement: You clearly state your disagreement with the given viewpoint and outline your main arguments related to public goods and social responsibility.
* Well-Organized Structure: The essay follows a clear structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph focuses on a specific point related to the benefits of taxation.
* Relevant Examples: You provide the example of Scandinavian countries to illustrate how taxes can fund free education and promote equal opportunities.
* Logical Flow: The arguments progress logically, connecting the importance of taxes to both public services and support for vulnerable populations.
* Formal Language: The essay uses appropriate vocabulary and grammar for an academic context.
Areas for Improvement:
* Sentence Structure Variety: Some sentences are quite long and complex, making them slightly difficult to follow. Try varying sentence length and structure to improve readability.
* Vocabulary Precision: While your vocabulary is generally strong, there are a few instances where more precise word choices would strengthen your argument. For example, instead of "physical," you could use "disabilities" or "age" to clarify the challenges faced by vulnerable populations.
* Addressing Counterarguments: While you briefly mention potential suspicion about mismanagement of tax funds, it would be beneficial to address this concern more directly. You could acknowledge the issue and propose solutions, such as greater transparency or accountability measures.
* Conclusion Depth: The conclusion could be strengthened by briefly summarizing the main points and restating your position in a more impactful way.
Specific Suggestions:
* Sentence Variety: In the first paragraph, the sentence "To fund in these aspects of communities, taxpayers need to pay tax, so that officials can ensure there is sufficient money in national budget" could be split into two shorter sentences for better clarity.
* Vocabulary Precision: In the second paragraph, instead of "physical," use a more specific term like "disabilities" or "age-related limitations."
* Addressing Counterarguments: In the first paragraph, after mentioning potential suspicion about mismanagement, add a sentence like, "However, implementing measures to ensure transparency and accountability in government spending can address these concerns and build trust in the tax system."
* Conclusion Depth: In the conclusion, add a sentence that summarizes the key benefits of taxation, like "By contributing to the common good through taxes, we create a more equitable and prosperous society for all."
Overall:
This is a well-written essay that effectively argues for the importance of taxation. With a few refinements to sentence structure, vocabulary, and addressing counterarguments, you can further enhance the clarity and persuasiveness of your writing. | 86 | 0 | Loading... |
34 ## Revised Essay with Explanations:
It is widely believed that individuals should have the right to retain all their income without contributing to the taxation system. However, I strongly disagree with this perspective due to the crucial role taxes play in funding essential public services and supporting vulnerable members of society.
* Revision: "It is thought by some" changed to "It is widely believed" for a more formal tone. "Income earners" changed to "individuals" for conciseness. "Need to have rights" rephrased to "should have the right" for improved clarity.
Firstly, taxation systems are fundamental for the provision of public goods. Governments bear the responsibility of providing citizens with vital services such as healthcare, education, and public transportation infrastructure. Tax revenue ensures adequate funding for these services, enabling officials to maintain and improve them for the benefit of all. While concerns regarding potential mismanagement of tax funds may exist, many countries strive for efficient allocation and utilize tax revenue to create a more equitable society. For instance, Scandinavian nations, renowned for their higher tax rates, offer free education to all citizens, demonstrating how taxes can foster equal opportunities and social mobility.
* Revision: "Hold significant importance" replaced with "are fundamental" for stronger emphasis. "Aspects of communities" replaced with the specific examples of "healthcare, education, and public transportation infrastructure" for clarity. Added a sentence acknowledging concerns about mismanagement and highlighting efforts towards efficient allocation.
Furthermore, paying taxes can be considered a civic duty and an act of social responsibility. Within any society, there are vulnerable individuals who, due to disabilities, age-related limitations, or other circumstances, are unable to attain a decent standard of living despite their willingness to work. Tax revenue, through targeted allocation, can alleviate the challenges faced by these individuals and provide them with essential support. Neglecting this responsibility would leave vulnerable populations at risk of severe hardship and perpetuate social inequalities. Therefore, contributing to the collective well-being through taxation is a moral imperative.
* Revision: "Tax-paying" changed to "paying taxes" for better flow. "Physical" replaced with "disabilities, age-related limitations" for accuracy. "Acceptable standard of living" replaced with "decent standard of living" for improved formality. "Being a human" replaced with "moral imperative" for a more impactful conclusion.
In conclusion, taxes, when utilized responsibly, contribute significantly to the betterment of society as a whole. By funding essential public services and providing support for vulnerable populations, tax revenue paves the way for a more equitable and prosperous future for all. Therefore, it is our collective responsibility to contribute to this shared endeavor through the taxation system.
* Revision: Added a sentence summarizing the key benefits of taxation and emphasizing the collective responsibility.
These revisions aim to enhance the essay's clarity, formality, and persuasiveness while maintaining the core arguments and structure of your original work. | 92 | 0 | Loading... |
35 The pie charts compare the percentage of and number of new cars sold in Australia in April in 1994, 2004 and 2014. Overall, both the number and percentage of market share of new Saloon cars remained to the main cars sold in all three years, although its market share decreased significantly. By 2014, the market share of SUV cars came to second, exceeding other unidentified cars. Additionally, the total number of cars increased noticeably.
In 1994, the number of Saloon cars made up third fourth (42000) of total new cars. Other unknown brand and SUV cars constituted 19% (7960) and 6% (2520), respectively.
By 2004, the percentage of new cars of both other unidentified and SUV cars grew to 21% and 14%, respectively. The number of these cars were 10080 for other cars and 6720 for SUV cars. In contrast, there was a significant downward tendency in the percentage of Saloon cars, declining to 65%. Despite 10% decline of this car brand, the number of SUV cars decreased by 300.
In 2014, the percentage of new SUV cars sold in this year was considered as the only car that increased. The market share of this car company grew to 24% (12480). The percentage of Saloon cars showed a decline to 55% (28600). Although the percentage of other unidentified cars remained unchanged at 19%, the number of this portion increased to 10920.
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36 Day 3
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37 Body paragraph lar juda Uzun bo'lib ketyapti negadir | 102 | 0 | Loading... |
38 It is thought by some that income earners need to have rights not to pay for taxation system. I completely disagree with this viewpoint since for several reasons related to the government-provided public goods, supporting vulnerable part of society.
To begin with, taxation systems hold significant importance on public goods. Governing bodies are usually responsible for providing their citizens with vital public services such as healthcare systems and public transport infrastructure. To fund in these aspects of communities, taxpayers need to pay tax, so that officials can ensure there is sufficient money in national budget. While some people may suspicious about mismanagement of tax funds, countries usually try to spend them in the most effective ways. For instance, in Scandinavian countries renowned with higher level of taxation systems, education is totally free for all their citizens mainly thanks to the taxes. This means that paying tax can help societies to ensure equitable opportunities of all members of society as opposed to individual benefits.
Additionally, tax-paying can be considered as social responsibility of people. Undoubtedly, there are often vulnerable members of each society, and they cannot access to acceptable standard of living due to their physical. They are usually disabled or retired people who cannot earn money to cover their needs, although they are willing to do this. Therefore, funds from tax, through allocating certain amount of them for vulnerable part of society, can alleviate problems of these people. If people, as humans, do not take on this responsibility, these vulnerable people may inevitably face severe issues in their lives because of their incapability to be self-sufficient. This is why citizens need to pay tax.
In conclusion, with responsible spending, taxes from one’s earnings can lead to better future for the general public and vulnerable people. This is because governments can ensure the well condition of public services, and people can also meet the requirements of being a human mainly due to the funding from taxpayers | 116 | 1 | Loading... |
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Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay taxes to the state.
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An increasing numbers of household appliances is bought by significant numbers of people these days. Although this tendency may have negative repercussions on the environment, many people can benefit from it, having more free time for activities other than domestic chores.
On the one hand, the impact of growing demand on household goods on the environment cannot be disregarded. Buying new household appliances may lead to obsolescence of the previous devices, since new appliances are usually more functional and able to outperform the previous generations of the technologies. This means that landfills may be the next place of these earlier-bought devices. For instance, in 2022, Americans generated 6.9 million tons of electric waste. Unfortunately, disposal of these goods is usually much more difficult due to their hazardous materials they are made from, potentially contributing to the environmental issues. This can explain why buying more household goods can be damaging for the ecology.
On the other hand, people can acquire more free time due to the conveniences created by the new and modern household goods. With the technological prowess of household devices, there is often no need to do household chores manually any more. While not all of domestic chores can be done by household appliances, these devices can carry out most of the tasks. For instance, people do not need to wash laundries manually, as washing machines can take over this task. Instead, people can focus on their professional responsibilities or simply spend quality time together with their family members.
In conclusion, the increasing demand for household goods can exacerbate already existing environmental problems. However, it should be noted that people can enjoy their life in a far better way thanks to the comfort offered by these devices.
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